Welcome to a new edition of Horror Gaming and we return to another gaming CP about Pokemon. Ever since gaming CPs started, the series was always used to tell these creepy stories of a player’s experience gone wrong. It started with Blood Edition and despite being a terribly written story filled with all sorts of tropes; a trend began. Many ideas would spawn from it such as Black Edition where a guy gets haunted by the ghost within the game. Of course, then there was Tarnished Gold, a story I already reviewed on this site three years ago. Out of the three mentioned this was the best one written even though the plot recycled several clichés. However, we haven’t gone over a Yellow version yet and aside Gold and Glitchlett that’s all I reviewed. I do remember listening to a narration of a Rotted Yellow story somewhere on YouTube. These are the only ones found to my knowledge unless there were some hidden on the web. Now, the tale is about a guy who after playing most of his games suddenly has the urge to replay Pokémon Yellow. Will this be the same experience that usually plays out or will something strange happen in his new playthrough? Let's begin... It’s good for a story to open differently instead of rehashing phantom sellers and reliving childhoods. The main protagonist mentions how after being bored of his library; the guy gets an urge to replay Pokemon Yellow edition. As the kid plays it for a little, he notices the game was very different from a previous session, despite his new copy. There is our first strike of the story as Legendary Warrior didn’t bother to explain this part. Probably my biggest issues with these plots are when the author writes something happening but doesn’t explain how. Yes, I am aware of those plots that tried to engage the viewers’ imagination however, at least they provide hints to what possibly occurred. You get none of that here as the only explanation given was being a newly bought copy for the GBA. The author also never went into whether this was a rom hack either as his fresh copy is different from the original game. Just as the CP started, it then gets a second strike from the beginning too. The guy explains his copy of Yellow version was somehow a port for the GBA. Was this an accident on the writer’s part? I wasn’t aware Pokémon Yellow was ported to the GBA or even remade on the same system. It’s hard to tell if the writer made a mistake or was done intentionally to describe an alternate reality. Of course, we will explore the issue of not proofreading later because this has become a recurring thing—At this point I find not proofreading an increasing problem from these writers. If there was another issue would come from using blood and gore as a scare tactic. During the story the guy finds himself in a dark labyrinth as he ventures through the underground structure. Right from the start he describes the room Red was in, chained with rotten corpses of other NPCs. How does this scene of corpses chain to walls make the plot terrifying? That’s another thing he was able to tell they were dead bodies, but how when the room was barely lit in limited 8-bit graphics. It didn’t stop there either because the player would find zombified Pokémon with gore visuals as he ventures in the strange dungeon. His playthrough leads him to why Red was locked in a cave-like labyrinth as Blue kidnapped his rival. Of course, the buried alive character was used to describe Blue’s appearance as he was missing his legs and had one arm in a grotesque manner. I guess the first time wasn’t enough to use gore but since the author resorted to this makes it our third strike. The next scene leads the guy to battling Blue despite being at a disadvantage and he still won. Now the one part that appeared rushed in the writing is when he encounters a ghost version of Ash from the anime. Not only did this seemed forced — seriously he/she added a Darkrai and two MissingNos to his party — Ash serves no purpose as a mention in the plot. The author does realize the game’s world, and the anime’s own are separate continuities, right? It ends the chapter with Red beating a ghostly Ash and getting out of the Labyrinth and back to Pallet Town. Unfortunately, we never learn why a zombified Blue kidnapped Red or the reason Ash’s spirit haunted the tunnel by guarding the entrance. It’s simply never explained whether there were any connections to both continuities and why the former champion wanted his rival dead. The way the story explained Blue’s reason in the game for his action is eerily similar to Tarnished Gold. However, the execution is worse here as Polyhexian — the author of the Tarnished Gold CP — at least told the character’s lengthy game of Silver. Yes, it's never explained why Giovanni went psycho but Moron #84 (main character of Tarnished Gold) described his experience. We come to our fourth strike and it's amusing how short the “Epilogue” was at the end. What Epilogue was there because hardly one sentence justified its purpose. The guy explains it will take him a while to get into Pokémon games because he seemed freaked out. The plot literally ends here as he claims this is how dark the series can become. That is the second time I noticed a CP character would get scared over a rom hack. It pales in comparison to others like Glitchlett which used the original game’s strange glitch to creep the player out. That is the reason this is considered a strike since an epilogue wasn’t needed to get the character’s point across. Now, we come to the fifth strike as all the chapters share the same problem of poor writing. I’ve seen my fair share of terrible wording and sentence structure but never was it bad to such a degree. In fact, this is the worst put together CP I ever read as everything is a single large paragraph. When your paragraphs get too lengthy then, you should break them up and try to BS any other point between the two. There were also many times the author used the same wording and grammar. I saw this mostly from starting the sentence with “But” and “And” or applying the same words to break up the length. There isn’t anything informal or is a grammar issue with using those words to begin a sentence—The thing is when overusing it can make the grammar lose value and meaning. It was even worse when the writer used “but” too frequently as a conjunction. Of course, I can’t forget the constant usage of an ellipsis (…) whenever the character spoke through the narration. Usually, this grammar style is used mostly for dialogue as the plot had hardly any between two characters outside the game. Even then, the author would end sentences with an ellipsis on almost everyone, I mean no one pauses or trails off that much. It’s the reason I don’t use em dashes (—) often and reduce them to one or two per paragraph. Normally, you never hear me harp on bad grammar or poor wording and sentence structure; however, when noticeable it can really be distracting to a reader. For once we stumbled upon a terrible Pokepasta as things in the story were happening for the sake of it. Looking back, we always noticed Lavender Town or anything involving Red/Blue version from Gen 1 to see the most use in storytelling. However, it's interesting to find one that despite being in Gen 1 was about a strange Yellow version. Even though the opening was rather uninteresting, at least it didn’t start out with X character wanting to relive their childhood. Then the story goes downhill from that point when the same problems resurface from those early 2010s CPs. The tale had a few instances of logic gaps found from his version of yellow being for the GBA. Legendary never explained if it was simply a rom hack for the portable system or this is an alternate reality. The plot feels similar to the Super Metroid CP with the only difference being it’s much worse this time. Then there is gore being used in an attempt at making the scenes scary. There wasn't one time I was shaking in my skirt from these weak scare tactics—All this did was make me roll my eyes and sign from such an overused trope. By 2014, most writers should have moved away from this repetitive model and even today the CP was never improved upon. It's a great thing Yuber Neclod and L.W. Sulton started a good trend on how to produce quality gaming creepypastas from that point on. Rating: 4.5/10 Terrible Source Quotev.com. (March 22, 2014). Pokémon Creepypasta: Forgotten Yellow. Legendary Warrior. https://www.quotev.com/story/4594269/Pokemon-Creepypasta-Forgotten-Yellow/1
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